Writing gotchas

Because there are so many authors writing advice on writing I figured I might as well write down the things that I encountered while I’m writing.
It’ll basically be a list of the bad habits I discovered in my writing and try to avoid nowadays.

1) She/he felt;
Probably one of the first things that started to irritate me. It’s the whole passive/active writing thing. It’s telling something happened with yet another layer in between.

Example:
She felt his fingertips carefully tracing her delicate curves.

Just say it directly:
His fingertips traced her delicate curves carefully.

See?

Another thing I was guilty of:
She felt a shudder rushing through her exposed body.

Do this:
A shudder rushed through her exposed body.

There’s no need to say she felt anything. Of course she felt it. Unless we’re talking about an android who just recently upgraded to a new skin equipped with sensors.

2) she/he started;
As with the felt thing, started is a passive method of telling things.

Example:
She started to take off her tight dress.

Let it happen, don’t just tell it’s about to happen:
She took off her tight dress.

One more:
He started to kiss softly along the back of her thighs.

It’s:
He kissed softly along the back of her thighs.

3) being, became
Have to look up what it was with these expressions. ;-)

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4 Responses to Writing gotchas

  1. Lunnah says:

    This is great advice! I’ll definitely have to look out for that in my own writing. :)

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